Blog #7

I feel that I have not improved as a writer because I have not learned any new things. I have not seen my writing improve because I am probably not putting all my effort on my essays. I am not blaming the class because I realize that I am slacking off. I know that if I put a little more time on my work my writing will improve. However, I am accomplishing my goals for this class because I am keeping focus through out the class. I feel that the class has a lot to after that is why I am learning and keeping a decent grade. Furthermore, if I would change something about the class is writing blogs. I really do not see the point in creating a blogger. I feel that my grade is going down because I do not keep on track in posting blogs. I feel that writing blogs are a waist of time because I do not learn anything since I do it just to get it done. My writing process has not change because I feel that it is effective. It is effective only when I put my full effort on it.

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Assignment #4-Thinking Critically About Revisions

My first rough draft had many comma splices and fragments. I was just writing to take up space and make my paper longer. However, my final draft is detailed and has many good ideas. I was writing about what happened instead of just making stuff up to fill up the page. My final draft has complete sentences with no run-ons or fragments. I made major revisions to my sentences because I knew I wrote my paper really fast without putting a lot of thought. Therefore I knew I was going to have plenty of fragments. I always had a problem with fragments that is why I focused more on my sentences. I have identified that as a writer I tend to get off track. Therefore, I have to reread every paragraph before I move to the next one. I tend to focus on my sentences and paragraphs. What made me make the revisions I did was rereading because as I read what I wrote I saw many mistakes. When I read over my paper I always find mistakes. I find rereading to be very effective. I believe that my introduction is my strongest point because I know how to introduce my paper. Also, I know how to get to the point easily which is why my introductions are good. I tend to have a lot to talk about when I start my paper, however, I find it difficult to write my conclusion because after writing a long paper I do not feel like restating everything. I had always found it difficult to write my conclusion because I do not know how to summarize a whole paper into a small paragraph.